Sunday, February 22, 2009

Scriptwriter Chronicles: MEN ON THE ROAD (Part 24)

Part 24 - Confessions

Cameron and Josh sit at the kitchen table talking quietly while Evelyn does the dishes...

Cameron
What exactly did you hear?

Josh
Everything and if my dad was hurt in any way I'll hate you

Cameron
He's not hurt, and keep your voice down

Josh
Why did you do that, I thought you stopped being bad

Cameron
I was helping a friend, you wouldnt understand little man

Evelyn
Right boys after these dishes I'll be back, i'll be going to Jane's to bury some demons

In Julian's car....

Gerald
Im jumping in head first, are you being loyal to Kim?

Sebastian
What kinda question is that?

Julian & Gerald
Answer it!

Sebastian
Alright! Yes, yes I am

At Jane's house..

Natalie
I know him through Gerald and Julian

Kim
Oh and has he ever metioned me to you?

Michelle
Nope

Jane
Michelle!?!

Natalie
Wait, is it even the same one? What does he look like?

Kim
"Tall" "dark" "handsome", medium build sometimes wears glasses, tattoo of daffy duck on his left arm

Michelle
Yep thats him

In David's Car...

Ritchie
Ok I've been silent for too long I dont appreciate the disrespect you've given me today

Nadine
Take it or leave it, thats just my reaction to people who are in my business

Ritchie
No it's your reaction when you have something to hide

Nadine
I dont have anything to hide

A few hundred metres in front....

Gerald
Bollocks, I have visual and digital proof that says you're lying

Sebastian
You can stick that proof up your ass mate, I'm telling you I've been faithful, however I am looking to break up with her

Julian
Why's that?

Gerald
Because he cheated on her

Sebastian & Julian
What!?!

Back at David's house...

Cameron
Oh No Cameron shakes his head as he comes off the phone

Joshua
What's wrong?

Cameron
My friends got arrested, shit!!

Across the road...

Kim
Well sorry to say but your beloved friend cheated on me and my sister is about to tell me who with, in fact I might call her now

Natalie
Nadine?

Kim
Yep she's in the car with your friend, I put her up to it
Jane and Natalie look at each other

Michelle
Oh Oh

Across the road once more evelyn is about to leave david's when her phone rings

Evelyn
Hi David, yeah I just made then dinner. How long are you gonna be?....30 minutes? ok, I'm just going across to the girls....I said Im just goi...whats that noise in the back?

In David's Car....

Ritchie
Nadine I can sense it, you've been sleeping with Sebastian havent you

David
Please people Im on the phone

Nadine
No I didnt!!

David
I'll call you back Evelyn these two are acting a fool

In Julian's car...

Gerald
Im not one to lie for nothing so lets just bring things out in the open. I saw your text message and I saw what you did. I put two and two together. Sebastian's heart skips a beat

Sebastian
I've had enough of this

Julian
Seb take it like a man

Gerald
Exactly, I know, and Julian deserves to know, do you want me to spell it out? ok fine!...

Back in Jane's house....

Jane
You know what I'm a little ill, I think everyone should leave

Kim
I'm sorry but I'm not leaving til I get my answer from Nadine. Jane and Natalie look at each other again Why do you two keep looking at ecah other? I sthere something you aren't telling me?

Jane
No...course not, it's just time to leave

Kim
I can read your eyes Jane, you're lying to me!!

Just under half an hour down the motorway....

Ritchie
Yes you are. you're sleepign with Sebastian, it all makes perfect sense!

David
Sebastian? wow thats abit far-fetched then again I dont know you guys so

Nadine
Im not sleeping with Sebastian, someone else is

David
Thats where I've seen his face before, this morning at Julian's house, he's come to see Jane a couple times after Julian's gone to work in the mornign actually oh my god!! Sebastian's sleeping with Jane!

Nadine
Yep

Ritchie
What!!?

At Jane' house, Evelyn burst through...

Evelyn
I cant take it anymore, I've held it in since this morning but no more, Jane you and Julian should not be in a relationship that is based on adultery

Natalie
Evelyn dont

Evelyn
No Natalie shut up, you can still build with Sebastian but Jane cant...

Kim
Sebastian?

Michelle
Oh Oh

Kim

You're the one sleeping with him? Kim has venom in her eyes


Natalie
.....No

Jane
I am

In Julian's car Sebastian and Gerald speak at the same time with contrasting results

Gerald
Sebastian is sleeping with Nadine
Sebastian
Im sleeping with Jane


Gerald and Julian
WHAT!?!

Julian lets go of the wheel; as he looks back at Sebastian, the car swerves into a hard shoulder and flips over tumbling three times. It lays in the middle of the motorway.

TO BE CONTINUED....

6 comments so far....:

Anonymous said...

Oh me oh my! The drama, I can't wait for the climax ;)

Anonymous said...

wooooooooow!

Anonymous said...

after this long journey Im upset ita nearly over. The climax is looking very appetizing! i cant wait either!

Anonymous said...

So compelling, the twists, the turns, very Eric Jerome Dickey. I can sense the last installment is going to be a scorcher. Too hot...

Anonymous said...

Wow - after my catch up with 18 - 24, i must say, my eyes were burning me lol! I just can't believe Sebastian. One thing this script highlights is that everybody Lies...The truth always comes out. Can't wait for 25!!

Anonymous said...

erm where is part 25?? hurry up na man! lol
i'm loving this boi!!

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